| Author | Message |
|---|---|
 Post subject: a v day poemPosted: Sun Feb 15, 2004 5:54 am 
i wrote this poem for the "Sisters of Dupree", welp here it goes: i picked a flower covered in blue, took it to the field to give to you, you were there wide eyes and all, even though you stood ever so tall. you took it and held it to your loving heart, and then the petals began to fall apart, it withered and wrapped around a dead stem, but then it began to grow a limb. one, then two, then three and finally four, it was now a pure white rose with tickling thorns, that had been graced by your touched, and sense then, not forlorn. _________________ "Waste today, and tomorrow will never be the same" visit my new Xanggggggaaaaa....... http://www.xanga.com/home.aspx?user=humbleabode |
|
|
Joined: 08 Jan 2004 | Posts: 96 | Location: laurel hill, florida
|
|
      |
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Sun Feb 15, 2004 8:08 am
Wow! Did you really write that? I'm impressed! |
|
|
Joined: 11 Nov 2002 | Posts: 3695 | Location: Tyler, TX
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Sun Feb 15, 2004 12:04 pm
dude thats some deep stuff.....awesome _________________ www.myspace.com/goodbyeterminal -Band |
|
|
Joined: 30 Jan 2004 | Posts: 1342 | Location: New England
|
|
 |
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Sun Feb 15, 2004 5:54 pm
thats pretty, and deep, i liked it _________________ Music died with Kurt Cobain <<>><<>><<>><<>><< If the sky falls can I count on your vote? |
|
|
Joined: 15 Jan 2004 | Posts: 5464 | Location: Galt, California
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Sun Feb 15, 2004 6:39 pm
Yeah its better than the stuff you write nick... lol no seriously though its good. _________________ 90% of all statistics are made up... A pedestrian hit me and went under my car... http://www.xanga.com/ryanguitarist www.japetto.cjb.net |
|
|
Joined: 20 Jan 2004 | Posts: 81 | Location: Galt, California
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Sun Feb 15, 2004 6:43 pm
ive never showd you my stuff  _________________ Music died with Kurt Cobain <<>><<>><<>><<>><< If the sky falls can I count on your vote? |
|
|
Joined: 15 Jan 2004 | Posts: 5464 | Location: Galt, California
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: awesome Posted: Tue Feb 17, 2004 1:50 am
i cant belive you like it, ive always thought my poems sucked. _________________ "Waste today, and tomorrow will never be the same" visit my new Xanggggggaaaaa....... http://www.xanga.com/home.aspx?user=humbleabode |
|
|
Joined: 08 Jan 2004 | Posts: 96 | Location: laurel hill, florida
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Tue Feb 17, 2004 1:52 am
nah man, it's good. you should do more! Rob |
|
|
Joined: 06 Feb 2004 | Posts: 40 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Tue Feb 17, 2004 3:41 am
that's pretty. _________________ If the end of the world has proper noodles I'll probably be okay with it. |
|
|
Joined: 29 Jun 2003 | Posts: 11069 | Location: Prague
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Wed Feb 18, 2004 7:01 am
Most poets who believe there poems suck have written some great poems. It's just some kind of not wanting to admit it type thing. I've written a few poems that I said they sucked, but everyone that read it loved the poem. I think it's a commong thing among some poets. Love your poem by the way. Does anyone write poetry where they don't use a rhyming scheme? I would love to read anyone's poetry that writes poems. _________________ 
|
|
|
Joined: 07 Jan 2004 | Posts: 355 | Location: Mountain Home AFB, ID
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Wed Feb 18, 2004 7:34 am
i wrote one like that. it's supposed to be a song, but i don't have music for it yet. _________________ If the end of the world has proper noodles I'll probably be okay with it. |
|
|
Joined: 29 Jun 2003 | Posts: 11069 | Location: Prague
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Wed Feb 18, 2004 8:24 am
i really like your poem! amy -> http://www.eisley.org/forum/viewtopic.php?t=845 (poetry thread from forum past.. things to read) _________________ "Commit to the Lord whatever you do and your plans will succeed." prov 16:3 |
|
|
Joined: 29 Jan 2003 | Posts: 1907 | Location: cypress, texas
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Wed Feb 18, 2004 3:49 pm
yeah, awesome poem. When you worry about whether your art is good or not, sometimes it can create creative constipation. Thats my problem when I write songs. _________________ there's no use fishermen, rowing from the consecrated whale |
|
|
Joined: 19 Jan 2004 | Posts: 105 | Location: one of the shallowest places on earth
|
|
|
|
|
|
Post subject: Posted: Wed Feb 18, 2004 3:51 pm
i think its cool as a poem, , songs can sometimes kill it _________________ Music died with Kurt Cobain <<>><<>><<>><<>><< If the sky falls can I count on your vote? |
|
|
Joined: 15 Jan 2004 | Posts: 5464 | Location: Galt, California
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Laughing City Forum Index -> eisleyBlog -> a v day poem
Page 1 of 1 |
|
|
You cannot post new topics in this forum
You cannot reply to topics in this forum You cannot edit your posts in this forum You cannot delete your posts in this forum You cannot vote in polls in this forum |
|
|
All times are GMT - 12 Hours
|
|
